one day a level 5 was walking past a general store when he saw a sign saying free bronze armour he was about to go and get it when a old man stopped him and said "dont get the armour laddie aye it be cursed" but the level 5 got the armour anyway he saw the old man and the old man said "arr ye be a fool to be getting that there armour mark me words that armour will be the death of ye aye it will it will" the old man vanished out of sight. in 5 days later a lesser demon appeared from nowhere and was chasing after the level 5 he saw the old man again and asked him for help but the old man replied" ye should of listened to me laddie ye were a fool and now ye be a deadman it was me who cursed that armour arr i be the ghost of the armoured knight i cursed the armour so none could wear it but one of me own family arr i was mocked for being like a pirate arr KILL HIM NOW" the old man shouted it before the level 5 could react the claw of the lesser demon came pounding on to him. he was dead. so waddya think? please can someone post a reply plz its driving me insane!!!!!!

Calm down, people go days without getting replies here. A half hour hasn't even passed and already you're going insane! How do you survive car rides to your grandmother's house without frothing at the mouth and taking huge bites out of the upholstery?

This isn't a story, it's a paragraph. A paragraph with no punctuation or capitalization in the normal sense. I like the accent, but this is pretty much a mildly creative idea, not anything approaching a story. And the idea, so far as I can tell, isn't really suited for a longer work.

Good try anyway.

oh thats only a s\draft i plan to make it better and stuff oh and btw i dread going to my nans ;(

You know me so well.




Its hard to understand you, just fix the spelling, capitalzation, and grammer. Then it will be an o-k story. Since it has a bit of MISLAG.

Its ok needs lots of work thouhg but..... look on the bright side (if their is one) its not to bad of a plot just needs a lot of fixing keep working on it

To be fair, there are no actual misspelled words. Short of that, there's every error I can think of, but the spelling is fine.

In future, you really shouldn't post drafts in this forum. Only stories that have one full prologue or chapter, or more, should be posted. And one paragraph is not a prologue/chapter.

Emanick, please stop me from going on a murderous spree.

Oh God. Please tell me this is a joke. Please. Please. I don't even want to talk about this. Read the guide. Oh no.

yeah i am going to make it a lot more better than this dont worry i just wanted to hear what u fort about it and help me with ideas. on another note i need a name for the level 5 any ideas?


i am thinking: harry
joe
john
andrew
mark
dave
also if you have any sugestions please tell me i wont mind any female names

I hardly seen a plot in it to be honest.

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lol i was crying when i read this thats how funny it was!

by the way nice story as many others said could use some work possible something leading up to the day he dies, and try to make it sound more realistic like maybe he buys the armour from the old man becuase i doubt the old man would be kind enough to hang out around the general store and warn people what he did to the armour. i think the old man should poof in give him the armour for free and poof out and then show up at the end to tell him it was him who made him die, and so on. Needs work but a good topic.

I agree. Relax, runeman; even the most popular stories go for days without replies...

As for the story, the grammar, capitalization, and punctuation can hardly be worse, and to top it off, this is a noob story. I am no acommodating when it comes to noob stories. Yes, I'll slaughter every one.

On another note, I dread using terms such as 'level 5'. Use something that makes the story seem more realistic.

And lastly, Aliath, if Emanick tries to restrain you, I'll whack him on the head. I'd like to see you go on a murderous spree; heck, maybe I'll go with you.

Lastly, runeman, now you see how insane some of us are. I suggest that you tread lightly and try not to post half-baked tales of noobs here.

Now there's something we can all share a good laugh at.

I might not be laughing at the same thing as you are, but it IS pretty funny to see Manslayer post something like that as a reply.

Which is exactly what I was referring to.

good idea but you relly shouldnt post drafts on here

And im trying to put plots in my storys!