It was a sunny day in Runescape. But it wasn't peaceful because a war was to take place on the plains of Varrock. The combatants are: The guards and knights of Falador, the guards of Varrock , the guards of Lumbridge and the knights of Camelot. On the other side was Goblins: Goblin warriors, Goblin scouts, Goblin rangers and Goblin mages. The armies marched forward onto the green plains. This was not the first battle though, this was the fourth,the first battle was bloody and thousands of soldiers died and the battlefield in which they fought was a sandy area but now was littered with bodies,shields,swords,arrows,crossbows, shortbows,longbows,helmets and most of all the battlefield was now stained with blood.
The Goblins were winning the war but there was a beacon of hope for the Humans. There only hope lies with Canifis and Burthorpe but they have refused to take part in the war due to the bloody,violent and the fact that war is where the young and innocent's minds are warped by old and violent.

The battle: The warcrys of the soldiers and clatters of swords against shields were deafening. Then BANG!!! the war had started,swords hit against flesh,arrows flew into soldiers,blood splattered onto the floor and bodies fell to the floor. But it was a victory for the Humans! they had defeated the Goblins finally this victory was a great feeling for the Humans they had not had a win since the second battle.



so guys was this better than my other story or what

It's not a story. It's two paragraphs badly put together with seemingly no plot whatsoever.
Will review later. You can do better than this =(

No plot, As Squiggle said two sloppy paragraphs sticked together. You have two stories, three counting the closed one!

It was better than your other stories. The sentences were divided by punctuation and there was some background. Still, it had a lot of problems. You switch between past tense and present tense wording, the sentences are awkward, and worst of all it doesn't make any sense. Canifis is populated by evil werewolves, and Burthorpe is far more militant than any of the other cities you mentioned. There is no way werewolves would give two bits about a war between humans and goblins (well, okay, they'd fervently hope for as much slaughter as possible...), and while Burthorpe might not come to the aid of Varrock, it wouldn't be because the elders didn't want their kids' minds to be corrupted. Plus it's just written badly. Keep writing and you'll get better, but as of now there is very little inherent good in the tale.

yh but then when the wars finished the werewolves would probabaly slaughter the humans thats why they need werewolves though cuz they are powerful and could prob own all goblins in one go

There is a definite problem in this. Even though it's better than your other 'stories' it's pretty much still a pathetic attempt. As, to quote Squiggle, it's not a story, but two paragraphs stuck together with no plot whatsoever. Try again.

On a brighter note, if you keep enraging me like this, I may be driven to write something just to show what a slightly more attention-worthy tale is like.

Nice try, runeman, but it certainly doesn't cut it. You are basically only telling us what was happening instead of showing it to us. Not to mention everything is rushed. One second the humans and goblins are preparing for their fourth war, the other second, they have already won! Please, try elaborating more and give your scenery a lot more detail. You also need to show us the emotion. Your story was lifeless, it had no flavour and I certainly am not impressed.

To tell you the truth, The Curse of the Free Bronze Armour was your best story, but only because it made me chuckle a bit. I suggest you read some previous and existing stories here on The Story Mat (also check out The Library) as it can be really helpful.

Just What Exactly -Is- A Story by Em Jay

Guide To Writing Stories And Poetry by SlashingUK and Pixel Bunnie

A Guide To Story Making by Master Neverdead (aka Hexias)

Or maybe focus on one story?

ahhhhh screw it! i cant make good storys at all ;( god damn it well i aint makin any storys now
or could one of you help me create one

Oh! Pick me! Pick me! I'll help!

To start out with, follow the three links which I gave you in my previous post. They are very helpful. Once you're done carefully reading and understanding them, you will be knowing how to make your own story properly. Second of all, you also need to get some insight into the world of Gielinor (RuneScape) since you are planning to make a RuneScape story, am I right? To do that, simply visit the main RuneScape website and search for Lores and Histories. That will at least give you a basic view on the world. If you would like to go into detail, then you must research on this matter yourself.

After you're done doing what you are told, we will work on your fourth story which will, hopefully, win the hearts of many.

I'll help if you let me, but I'm not really a good team player. Check out the links Buland gave you (pay attention!) and run your stories through Microsoft Word.