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noaiXiaon
I'm new at this, and I very much would <3 some advice.

Shoutout:
Rayn is very inspiring. Not in the sense that I love his style or anything, but it's just the tone and way he writes that makes me want to... write poetry. He talks in cool, mellow tones and he is very realistic in his posts. Go see his works, please.




Necessity's Of Life

Under Water, Over Water
Moving All Around.

Skimming Out To Move Away
Try Not To Make a Sound.

A Stack Of Papers At My Right
My Best Friend To My Left.

A Choice To Make
My Life At Stake.

Ran Into The Ground.



My Friend Or Not


You Say You Are Not Lying
For Laughs You Are Not Vying
I Look To You
I Seek The Truth
Yet Truth Is Very Trying



The Road On Which I Walk


One day I'll look back
One day I'll turn around
One day I'll face the path I've lead,
One day I'll face the mistake's I've made,
One day I'll see a black, dark, huge cloud.
And one day I'll cry.



The End


A big shape in the water,
It comes right out at me.
A mystery, swaying in the tree's,
So strange a thing, it seems so airy.


A pair that's moving, another too.
A dog at play, a boy is free,
A car is coming, while I am their.
I turn and race, I want to be.

Amazingly, it misses,
Yet a black force comes, I feel...
A cold wind in my face, touche,
And I'm no more, I'm not real.


Read and CC
The Wolf 23
First two are good, i like them.
Third's a bit lacking but still has an impact.
Third is confusing, at first you use the rhyme per two line method, in the middle you use a rhyming couplet then you go back to the the rhyme per two line again. sleep.gif dry.gif

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noaiXiaon
I fixed it a little wink.gif
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