With hopes i continue a season thats lost,
i try to settle for what i have received,
and not for what i havent given.
We were all once strong willed individuals
I have come to conclusion that deceits most people.
I consider this a FACT and not a theory,
so now i fold
I ramble in your decency to only comfort my mental state
you pressure me to the point of collapse,
and built me up for the breakdown.
So i guess when it rains,
it pours.
There is a letter with your name on it
Read it wisely.
For it is An Abrupt End

I liked it, mainly the ending. The only thing that bothers me is how some random words that shouldn't be capitalized, are. Like This.

Next time, try posting in the library.

It's really awkward to read without any spacing via periods, semicolons and hyphens.

Personal editing:
With hopes I continue - a season that's lost,
I try to settle for that which I have received
Not for what I haven't given.

We were all once strong-willed individuals.
I have come to conclusion that deceits most people. This line in particular is just weird.
I consider this fact - Not theory!

So now I fold;
I ramble in your decency to comfort, my mental state.
Pressure me to the point of collapse!
Build me up; simply to tear me down!
{I would remove the rain lines here}

There is a letter with your name upon it -
Read it wisely
For it is an abrupt end.


If you're going to capital certain words you need to identify them for a reason, secondary message or stresses which are better off by changing the wording. Space each though out into a stanza. I'm not going to go over the violation of the English language because frankly I disagree with it and all of my poetry also violates the rules.

Thats some good editing i like it and thanks for the feedback.