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#1 OFFLINE   Mr FANG

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Posted 12 January 2012 - 02:55 AM

Go ahead
Get your pleasure
Laugh at me
Get your pleasure
Call me names
Get your pleasure
From my pain
To me
youíre all the same
The flaws in society exist
And youíre all perfect.

Itís all a game to you
Donít you see?
No, you donít
Or youíd see the pain
Itís nothing like that pain you feel.
Or felt when she dumped you
Or when he left you for her.
Who do you think you are?

Youíre not what you say
You are what you do
You talk the talk
But your actions say elsewise
Can you keep anything straight?
A mindset?
An action?
Anything!
Say what you do
Do what you say
Is that possible?

A sigh of relief
You could use some help
And then we all could have
A sigh of relief
But in the meantime

Go ahead
Get your pleasure
Laugh at me
Get your pleasure
Call me names
Get your pleasure
From my pain
Cause to me
youíre all the same
The flaws in society exist
And youíre all perfect.

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Posted 12 January 2012 - 02:58 AM

Some major problems with grammar in there.

I'm not even gonna comment on the content that much, I think it's obvious that you're upset about how people perceive you.

"Beneath this mask there is more than flesh, there is an idea."


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Posted 12 January 2012 - 12:15 PM

View PostFatalysm, on Jan 12 2012, 02:58 AM, said:

Some major problems with grammar in there.

I'm not even gonna comment on the content that much, I think it's obvious that you're upset about how people perceive you.
Grammar? What do you mean :(

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Posted 12 January 2012 - 12:23 PM

View PostMr FANG, on Jan 12 2012, 05:15 PM, said:

View PostFatalysm, on Jan 12 2012, 02:58 AM, said:

Some major problems with grammar in there.

I'm not even gonna comment on the content that much, I think it's obvious that you're upset about how people perceive you.
Grammar? What do you mean :(
http://dictionary.re.../browse/grammar

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the study of the way the sentences of a language are constructed; morphology and syntax.

"Beneath this mask there is more than flesh, there is an idea."


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Posted 12 January 2012 - 01:30 PM

View PostFatalysm, on Jan 12 2012, 12:23 PM, said:

View PostMr FANG, on Jan 12 2012, 05:15 PM, said:

View PostFatalysm, on Jan 12 2012, 02:58 AM, said:

Some major problems with grammar in there.

I'm not even gonna comment on the content that much, I think it's obvious that you're upset about how people perceive you.
Grammar? What do you mean :(
http://dictionary.re.../browse/grammar

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the study of the way the sentences of a language are constructed; morphology and syntax.
It's a poem. Line breaks are set up that way on purpose.

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#6 OFFLINE   Fatalysm

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Posted 12 January 2012 - 08:05 PM

View PostMr FANG, on Jan 12 2012, 06:30 PM, said:

View PostFatalysm, on Jan 12 2012, 12:23 PM, said:

View PostMr FANG, on Jan 12 2012, 05:15 PM, said:

View PostFatalysm, on Jan 12 2012, 02:58 AM, said:

Some major problems with grammar in there.

I'm not even gonna comment on the content that much, I think it's obvious that you're upset about how people perceive you.
Grammar? What do you mean :(
http://dictionary.re.../browse/grammar

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the study of the way the sentences of a language are constructed; morphology and syntax.
It's a poem. Line breaks are set up that way on purpose.
What of the unnecessary capital letters and lack of periods. :D

"Beneath this mask there is more than flesh, there is an idea."


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Posted 12 January 2012 - 10:32 PM

View PostFatalysm, on Jan 12 2012, 08:05 PM, said:

View PostMr FANG, on Jan 12 2012, 06:30 PM, said:

View PostFatalysm, on Jan 12 2012, 12:23 PM, said:

View PostMr FANG, on Jan 12 2012, 05:15 PM, said:

View PostFatalysm, on Jan 12 2012, 02:58 AM, said:

Some major problems with grammar in there.

I'm not even gonna comment on the content that much, I think it's obvious that you're upset about how people perceive you.
Grammar? What do you mean :D
http://dictionary.re.../browse/grammar

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the study of the way the sentences of a language are constructed; morphology and syntax.
It's a poem. Line breaks are set up that way on purpose.
What of the unnecessary capital letters and lack of periods. :P
I blame Microsoft word :(

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Posted 20 January 2012 - 08:01 AM

Depression? Need help?
Come to me!

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