Not really a story. I believe, that the only way you can turn a real event into a story is by adding a great amount of DETAIL. Otherwise, it is just a post, not a story and would belong in General Discussion. Bad grammar doesn't annoy me much in regular forums, but here I hate it. I mean, if you are writing a story, check, recheck, and check again to be sure you used proper grammar. Write rough drafts and never post something that you basically, "Wrote as you thought". Expand ALOT and it may turn out decent. But, until then, not good at all.